At the same time, and the only thought I can come up with in terms of a suggestion: there are a lot of different images and it was really on the third viewing I started to have a sense of all the threads of the story you’re trying to suggest here – the work they do, poverty, the difficult environment, how hard it is to actually get to school and be prepared, combined with the difficulties they face as girls. I found myself wanting more of each tiny story or feeling introduced by each image, and then feeling distracted by the next one that would come, especially when there were several on a screen at once. I wanted to be introduced to something I could devote myself to for a little bit longer so I could see and hear more, and so I felt more connected later when you open it up to focus on each of the three girls. I wonder what it might be like to have longer, more sustained images at the beginning, but slightly fewer of them?

I have loved reading your blog throughout your journey and will continue to check in. Thanks for giving us such rich food for thought and feeling!

The numbers are important to me, I’m shocked out of my comfortable life by, respond to and move into action with those kinds of facts.

One thing, I’m wondering what the trailer would look like if there was color or texture (print) instead of the white background? Sometimes it felt like too much white space, and my eye wanted something to be counterpoint to the powerful photography and for me the white space detracted from the images.

It was beautiful watching you two present last night. Congratulations – this is an incredible film-to-be!

I would suggest that you do a test, make a DVD or however you are releasing the production and then view and check title size

If I had a suggestion, it would be to reconsider the statistic titles that you play in the beginning. I think letting the story tell itself without intruding with numbers is more powerful. But that might be my idiosyncratic reaction.